Re: Please rate this review: Red Faction: Guerilla
Thanks for contributing a review, and for using the correct format (the beginning and end parts).
If you're interested in publishing on our home page, I hope you'll consider some editing, along the lines of what Chi has said. It's the boring, less-glamorous part of writing; but it's what we all do.
Definitely get rid of the 2nd person. Instead of "you do" or "you can", talk about yourself or the gamer. "I could," "the gamer is presented with," or "I was surprised that..." That will help a lot.
And it's hard to believe there is still non-subtitled dialog nowadays.