Re: Rate This Review: The Last Story
Awesome. Thanks for the feedback, both of you. I definitely see what you mean about giving a broader picture of the game; looking back, I stuck to the parts that interested me. This is some advice to chew on.
As for starting sentences like "now" and "see," I'm partial to the conversational tone they set if they're used correctly. On the other hand, they aren't necessary, and I need all the help I can get in trimming down that word count (I think the review comes in at 1,500 words, yeesh).