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Old 02-09-2010, 03:22 PM   #3
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Re: Please Rate this Review: DARK VOID

Great review Brandon, and that closing line is pretty impressive.

I'd second the recommendation to drop second person, and I think you could condense paragraph 10 down to just a couple lines in order to cut down on the length.

Otherwise I enjoyed it, and on a personal level I found this review to be much more helpful (since I was still hoping against hope) than the majority of Dark Void critiques I've seen so far.
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