"The overall presentation of Rainbow Six Vegas 2 is luscious, palatable, pleasing, sweet, satisfying, attractive, engaging, gratifying, or whatever word you would like to use."
"the weapons are standard"
Show, don't tell:
http://cubreporters.org/2008/10/writ...l-readers.html
Too many redundant words eg noticeable difference, generally obliterate, progressing for five years, flawless in all aspects, easier and oriented.
Read this:
http://www.orwell.ru/library/essays/...nglish/e_polit
And these:
http://www.economist.com/research/st...TOKEN=18275701
http://www.economist.com/research/st...TOKEN=18275701