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Old 12-31-2008, 03:14 PM   #6
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Re: Prince of Persia Review

*Really* nice job!

I agree with Jason about the length...the review didn't feel too short to me at all. There are some minor grammar and GameCritics style hiccups. You've got some extra adjectives and adverbs that are unnecessary (e.g. you say the game's easiness "evidently greatly upset me"--you don't need the "evidently"). Also, we avoid writing in the second person too much ( "Sure, you can pull off combos and string together some rather impressive looking moves...").Repacing the second-person references with "the gamer" or "the player" or even "I" would work.

All in all, an excellent job.
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