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Old 12-31-2008, 12:50 AM   #2
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Re: Please rate this review: Prince of Persia

Hey Izz.

This is a pretty darn good review. Your tone and style overall is quite readable and pleasant, and i liked what you had to say. i especially liked the bit where you examined what it meant to "die" in a game.

things to edit: the lightseeds reference will leave players who haven't tried the game in the dark, so that would need a bit more explanation. it might work betterin another section, too.

also, i felt like the review ended too soon... it sort of stutters to a close. another paragraph or two before the end would be optimal just for pacing purposes.


i'd say this review is definitely worth putting through the rewrite process, i'd like to see a polished version, for sure. = )
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