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Old 12-09-2008, 02:26 PM   #4
Jason Karney
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Re: Please rate this review: BioShock

Nice job.

I'm noticing a tendency in your writing to quote words for emphasis or to denote irony, such as "hacking" and "persuaded." (I remember this in Force Unleashed too.) Be careful not to overuse that in one review; I count five uses here, and I think one or two is sufficient.

There are a couple of things I'd like you to add, so we can get the ball rolling on publishing this review on our main page, since you've met the staff approvals. In your parent guide, you give the ESRB descriptors but no actual guidelines for parents. Also, a secondary, "splashy" title would fit in with our site format; if you don't supply one, we may make one up.

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